Tuesday, November 30, 2010

THROUGH THESE CATARACT EYES

[NOTE:  I HAD SENT THE PREVIOUS TWO STORIES AND A NUMBER OF OTHERS TO A FLASH FICTION ZOMBIE ANTHOLOGY WHICH SHALL REMAIN NAMELESS.  THE EDITOR KEPT SAYING THAT I WAS SHOWING AND NOT TELLING WITH THESE STORIES.  THIS IS A VALID ARGUMENT FOR "BITE ME," BUT IT WAS A STYLISTIC CHOICE I MADE.  THE REST OF THE STORIES WERE DEFINITE EXERCISES IN SHOWING.  I ONLY SHOWED YOU GUYS "THE LADY AND THE TRAMP" BECAUSE IT WAS THE ONLY GOOD ONE OF THE BUNCH.  THERE WERE PLENTY OF REASONS WHY THE OTHERS SHOULD HAVE BEEN REJECTED, BUT TELLING-NOT-SHOWING IS NOT ONE OF THEM.  THIS PISSED ME OFF, SO I WROTE THE FOLLOWING STORY, WHICH IS NOTHING BUT SHOWING.  THE EDITOR REJECTED ME AGAIN, PROBABLY BECAUSE THIS STORY PISSED HIM OFF.  IT IS BY NO MEANS GOOD, BUT I THINK IT'S FUCKIN' HILARIOUS.  HOPEFULLY, SO WILL YOU.  JUST THINK OF THIS AS ZOMBIE FICTION IF WILLIAM FAULKNER HAD TRIED HIS HAND AT IT.]

flow swarm step reach air green-world move-see meat-in-nose where?

step reach nothing swarm One-Brain ahead there!

step reach nothing step step step tickle swarm buzz uuuuugghhhh wave small-meat nothing-meat skin-crawl step step step reach grasp!

meat-hand pull slip grab pull swarm flow food mouth-squirt ahhhhh clamp!

AAAAAAAAAHHHHHHH!  AAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHH!

chew chew chew gulp smack-flash!

guh

swarm bite bite bite red chew chew meat-mouth deep down belly-gnaw still nothing-meat skin-crawl bite shiny-rope glisten-meat deep down aahhhhh BOOM!

oh hell oh no it's George they got George oh hell!

BOOM!

red-world new-meat un-fresh no belly-gnaw good-meat glisten-scream bite chew chew chew chick-BOOM!

guh

more new-meat un-fresh no eat can't-reach skin-crawl no nothing-meat

gimmie that you can't shoot for shit aim for the head not the arm stupid let me what about George he's gone there's nothing we can do chick-BOOM!

guh

red-world un-reach nothing-chew belly-gnaw move food chew-green-world spit uuuuuuugggghhhh

it's still moving do it again before the others catch on hurry do it chick-BOOM!

guuuuuuhhhhhhhh

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